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What did you like about this script? (HONEYMOON)

 

The beginning was great. Mike and Lily’s happiness and enthusiasm create a really nice atmosphere that falls into some deep tension and these two elements work very well together. Mike’s attitude about not getting the room he ordered helps set the stage for the escalation of events to come. The script does a nice job of feeding Mike and Lily setback after setback like the overbooking, AMP name, the old room, and the dead phone. It is around the time they arrive in the room where things seem really wrong and it creates a lot of tension. The first half also has some very good light humor which makes the scary aspect even better.

 

The concept of a couple being sent to die in the woods by a hotel seems like a really sick game and it is entertaining and terrifying thanks to the fact the Mike and Lily are a really cool couple. They seem like really nice, happy-go-lucky folk which helps make it understandable as to why they seem so cool about such a bad situation. They are extremely nice and likable characters and this script does a great job of building them up, creating tension and then leaving the question as to whether they will or will not make it out alive. Also, it was a nice touch to have them on their delayed honeymoon which makes the situation both sweet and terrifying.

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What did you like about this script? (HONEYMOON)

 

This script got really scary once Mike and Liza found out that Joe was fired. This draft set Joe up much better this time and by knowing he was fired, the script had an ominous cloud hanging over it as to when Joe would show up and when he did and acted normal it was so scary. After this point, the tension rose to a stomach-twisting fever pitch when it was revealed that Joe was fired. Once Mike and Liza got back to the room, all of the dominoes were set into place and the scares worked so well because there was a great set-up. This draft is much-improved and the twists and suspense this time were very effective.

 

One aspect that really works is Mike and Liza’s characters. They are very chill and have wanted this honeymoon for so long that their reactions to the various disappointments work because they are very patient. This makes them very likable and it is why the suspense works so well.  Because we care about them and because they are so nice the build-up to the attack and the attack itself are awesome.

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Hercules and Karma are both whimsical and fun to watch. The landlord is a clear obstacle.

 

Script is well-formatted.

 

The concept is fun and original; a strong backbone for a comedy series.

 

The tone is slapstick comedy meets 'the fools triumph.' Even though it's about two gods, their innocence to the human mindset is charming.

 

The landlord makes a great villain.

 

Marketable to all four quadrants.

 

A strong element of this script is how quickly we get into action.

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What do you like about this script? Karma and Hercules VS. the Landlord

The pilot is an imaginative variation of classic episodic stories in which a team of do-gooders work to help people in danger or in need. This team is led by a Greek god, Hercules, and Karma personified as a woman, with an assist from talking birds. Karma brings the magic to effect justice in kind while Hercules, true to form, does the heavy lifting.

 

The team’s work has a lot of visual humor. Karma, with a snap of her fingers or a flick of her wrist, makes the hapless Landlord suffer the same problems his tenants do. The birds pelt his windows with bird droppings that block his penthouse view. Hercules is a glorified handyman who faces a “tough room.” The tenants aren’t impressed by the sight of a man standing at their upper floor windows offering to help. He gets no respect (“The crazy guy gave me a big orange,” “No one’s that nice. Stay away, weirdo.”)

 

The team’s competitiveness is the source of funny banter, bickering, and one-upmanship. Examples include, “Maybe if I could help her enough she would let me do me,” “No, I’m the boss. We’ve been over this before,” “Huh. Never seen that before,” “You’re no help,” and, “Mr. It’s-All-About-Me got me a present?” among others. Crow and Owl’s ongoing debate about who is smarter sets up a funny recurring bit for future episodes, as does Hercules and Karma’s ongoing competition about whose methods are better.

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What worked? KARMA and HERCULES

 

A truly unique show, KARMA and HERCULES creates a world brand new to television. It mingles the mythic and the earthly, seamlessly integrating gods, heroes, humans and some giant talking birds all into an otherwise relatable world.

 

The character goals are well defined, set out as duties rather than missions of the heart- at the start. Hercules’ transition from bitter worker to sympathetic hero is heartwarming and well-crafted. It’s difficult to pinpoint the exact moment he starts to really care because it mounts so steadily.

 

Each mission leads to the next without a moment to spare, a time to stop and think. Before you know it, he’s grown some compassion. The landlord is horrid, yet his villainy feels grounded even within this supernatural world. He is a well-crafted character with goals and history. It is because of his careful crafting that makes Karma’s torture so entertaining.

 

It’s a visual story, the built-in scene transitions help to pace the story and to reminds the audience of the power of Karma. She’s fascinating and mysterious. The show has to potential to look completely different from any show on television.

 

The humor is constant and helps to brighten an otherwise bleak setting and situation.